The Steps – Alastair’s Photo Fiction

AnElephantCant count steps
He doesn’t know if there are six or seven
He runs out of fingers
But the question still lingers
Is this the stairway that leads to heaven

This is a weekly invitation to write a short piece of fiction (c. 150 words) based on a photo prompt (below) provided by Alastair.
Follow the link to see some great stories by some great writers.
But be sure to read AnElephant’s masterpiece first.
Or he will sulk.

Copyright Alastair Forbes

Copyright Alastair Forbes

The Steps

She knows he is watching as she climbs the steps.
She knows he has always loved to watch her walk.
Ever since that first time.
In this very spot.

She knew she was pretty, even in her school uniform, just sixteen years old.
My friend likes you, she told him.
I know.
What will I tell her?
Tell her I like you.
She tried to be cool, dispassionate, but he seemed to see right inside her.
She knew he was watching as she climbed the steps.

It is now 25 years and two children later.
She has just told him it is over, finally.
She tries to be cool, dispassionate, as she reaches the top, resisting the impulse to look round as she turns into the lane.
She barely has time to notice his van there before the cloth covers her face and she breathes the ether into her lungs.

About AnElephantCant

An artist/writer/poet combination whose blogs reflect an approach to life that celebrates nature and takes a tongue-in-cheek view of most issues. So you get rhymes and doodles, photographs and comment. Irreverent and irrelevant. Occasionally funny, sometimes serious, mostly pointless. https://anelephantcant.me/
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12 Responses to The Steps – Alastair’s Photo Fiction

  1. Don’t toy with someone’s heart! Excellent twist!

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  2. nightlake says:

    really scary and creepy.

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  3. EagleAye says:

    Yikers! I didn’t expect that at all. I like the descriptions of how she walked. I could see it in my mind. Very well written!

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  4. julespaige says:

    Lions and tigers and bears…Oh, my. Someone did not want his bird to fly!
    Just when you think it is safe…
    Great story.
    I’m here:
    http://julesinflashyfiction.wordpress.com/2013/06/17/alastairs-photo-fiction-june-16-2013-pawns/

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  5. Penny L Howe says:

    I liked your story, a most interesting ending though, unexpected. Be safe! xo

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  6. emmylgant says:

    You set it up step by step so beautifully.
    I read the last line and had to go back
    You lulled me so watching her hips sway!
    Une fois de plus, tu me surprends

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  7. zookyworld says:

    I was rooting for her, but that last line is a doozy… I’m still pulling for her, though. Such a sad scenario, creepy like the photo.

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  8. Oooh….then what…then what?? 🙂 Great job!!

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  9. Alastair says:

    I added your link 🙂

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  10. Alastair says:

    I guess he doesn’t want it to be over. That was an unexpected twist at the end.

    Great story my friend

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