Going Swimmingly – Friday Fictioneers

AnElephantCant wear fancy footwear
And he certainly can’t wear big boots
He has quite big toes
Though not as big as his nose
And he has really ginormously big foots

Once again it is Friday Fictioneer time.
Where svelte-shoed Rochelle hosts footwear fanatics from all over the world.
And some men.
And ABarefootedElephant.
The idea is to write a very short story, circa 100 words, based on this picture prompt (below).
That’s it.

Copyright – Adam Ickes

Copyright – Adam Ickes

Going Swimmingly

She arrives home to see the dog, nervous, at the poolside.
She wanders across, more curious than concerned.
He is floating face down, unmoving.
Dropping the groceries she takes quick steps and leaps to his rescue.

He is floating face down, unmoving.
He loves to lie still, listening to the rhythm of his heart.
Occasionally he moves his arms very slowly, very gently.
His shadow and the reflection of the ripples remind him of Da Vinci’s Universal Man.
He is at peace.

He sees a shadow and turns his head.
Her boot catches him on the temple, killing him instantly.

About AnElephantCant

An artist/writer/poet combination whose blogs reflect an approach to life that celebrates nature and takes a tongue-in-cheek view of most issues. So you get rhymes and doodles, photographs and comment. Irreverent and irrelevant. Occasionally funny, sometimes serious, mostly pointless. https://anelephantcant.me/
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72 Responses to Going Swimmingly – Friday Fictioneers

  1. MythRider says:

    Oh. Not the ending I was expecting! Nice surprise.

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  2. Wow! that had a kick in it!

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  3. kerrieanns says:

    Wasn’t expecting that! Loved your intro poem as well 😀

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  4. EagleAye says:

    Oh the vicious irony. Brilliantly done, sir Elephant!

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  5. Taygibay says:

    There was rarely as much bad done in this world than by people who thought they were doing good. Thought being central, two thumbs up. Tay.

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  6. hugmamma says:

    I was so prepared for a happy ending. You totally sucked me in…elephant can’t!

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  7. Oh! The perfect irony and a bit macabre!. Very well done!

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  8. MrBinks says:

    The made me laugh out loud at the end. I guess that says way too much about me. Well played 🙂

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  9. Eena says:

    AnElephant loves to swim and watch his shadow. And a lady has really awful aim. The man should’ve known.

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  10. Bastet says:

    Geez…what a story Elephant! And they talk about crystal shops and your kind…this lady was a tad clumsy!

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  11. Satya Rekha says:

    Ouch! Thats sad…
    Nice!

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  12. J. Milburn says:

    Oh, the peaceful contemplation ruined by a boot to the head, leading to eternal peace. Great story!

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  13. Damn thats a kick in the head.

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  14. Al says:

    hahaha Whoops. Brilliant

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  15. AnElephant is a wicked story teller. In Boston, where I grew up, wicked means one thing… but I mean wicked here. I’ve been blindsided. So cruel.

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  16. JKBradley says:

    I didn’t just snicker aloud, did I?

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  17. I’d say your bodycount is getting pretty high by now..

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  18. AnElephantCan be very sneaky! didn’t see that one coming at all. well done 🙂

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  19. Yikes! I didn’t see that one coming. 😯

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  20. misskzebra says:

    Ouch! I hope I never get a rescue like this!

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  21. I didn’t see that one coming and obviously he didn’t either.

    janet

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  22. Sandra says:

    He’s certainly at peace now then… 😦 Nicely done.

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  23. Excellent ending my friend!

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  24. Dee says:

    Some rescue!! Great take on the prompt, loved the twist at the end. Well done
    Dee

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  25. Adam Ickes says:

    Another Wednesday, another death by boot to the temple. These things happen far too often. Nicely told.

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  26. Jan Brown says:

    Ouch! Quite a shocking story twist!

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  27. high five and raspberries says:

    C’est trop aimer quand on en meurt. well done sir!

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  28. atrm61 says:

    Moral of the story-don’t lie around doing nothing-peacefully,lol!A great twist in the story-though my wicked,scheming mind wonders if that kick was an accident? 😉

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  29. Anja says:

    *sigh…..picks up pen and tally book*

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  30. emmylgant says:

    No good deed goes unpunished… There is no recovery from this one for either of them.
    Ugghh. Good story. Very well told.
    Gives me a sinking feeling though 😦

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  31. The dark irony of this makes me laugh. Great story; It is so quintessentially you (that’s a compliment 😉 ).

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  32. Dear Elephant,

    Not much a rescue I’d say. But a good story.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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  33. A Femme fatale dear Sir elephant, you cannot take a trick dear sir, you are either dishing out the finality to some unsuspecting one or having it done to you. Great piece by the way. enjoyed it….

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