Lamplight – Friday Fictioneers

AnElephantCant claim to be smart
He is rarely accused of being too bright
But when he sees this pic
It all seems to click
Perhaps he at last sees the light

Once again it is Friday Fictioneer time.
Where The Lady of the Lamp Rochelle shines gloriously into the night of numberless naturally knowledgeable narrators.
And AnElephant fumbles around in the dark as usual.
The idea is to write a very short story, circa 100 words, based on this picture prompt (below).
That’s it.

Copyright – Dawn M. Miller

Copyright – Dawn M. Miller

Lamplight
No matter how many lamps I light, it always seems to be dark now.
Ever since my wife died, so unexpectedly.
When I was abroad, and that funny little French chap I met on the train to Paris just popped in.
And kept his side of the bargain.
No way I am keeping mine, he must think I am mad!
And he gave me all those serious warnings.
Like I care.
Strange man, what was his name?
Ah yes, Luc de Mons.
But why is it no matter how many lamps I light, it always seems to be dark now?

About AnElephantCant

An artist/writer/poet combination whose blogs reflect an approach to life that celebrates nature and takes a tongue-in-cheek view of most issues. So you get rhymes and doodles, photographs and comment. Irreverent and irrelevant. Occasionally funny, sometimes serious, mostly pointless. https://anelephantcant.me/
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71 Responses to Lamplight – Friday Fictioneers

  1. Eena says:

    I hate that AnElephant always makes me think but I’m rather proud I got it this time around. My FF last week was similar though for a more SimpleMindedElephant.

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  2. You are so clever I really have to pay attention when I read your 100 words!

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  3. This is clever
    Took me a few times to get ‘it’ but it hit me finally with the wrath of a tornado!

    P.S. I can’t get enough of this even after knowing the identity of Luc De mons

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  4. Wonderful. The light of his life is no longer with him. Nice take on this prompt.

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  5. camgal says:

    It’s been too long since I visited. Loved this piece AnElephant 🙂

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  6. atrm61 says:

    With a name like that and him being french too-no bargain could be straight,no? ;-)Poor guy-it definitely must be dark (and cold too) without a soul to warm him-maybe he will warm up once he reaches Luc’s lawn where I believe there is an eternal barbecue going on? ;-)Loved this well spun tale of dark mystique

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  7. I read the comments to “get it”. I thought it was a classic story of murder-swop. But no.
    Nice writing.

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  8. Terrifying! I took me a few reads because at first I hadn’t understood the reference to Lucifer, but when I did, I was all “wow” 😀 Loved it!

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  9. Taygibay says:

    Luc(ifer) demon ( here Mons the town ) or Luc the evangelist and his “stronger than the demons” passage or even Luc the character in Personal Demons the book by Lisa Desrochers. AnElephantCan’t certainly opened possibilities for the readers. There is also the Catholic school Saint-Luc de Mons though! Maybe AnElephantCan’t studied there?
    Good story and great use of the recursive format to close the loop, Tay.

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  10. Linda Vernon says:

    Very imaginative. I’d say the devil’s in the details only in this case I think the devil is in the big picture.

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  11. Nan Falkner says:

    Is it Lucifer? I’m dumber than rocks – so it may not be. I think de Mons is demons. I still like it – you are all more clever than I. Thanks for the read!

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  12. DCTdesigns says:

    The devil wears a french disguise this night.One really shouldn’t make bargains they can’t get out of. The devil always gets his price. No fear. very soon he will be surrounded by burning light. Very good story.

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  13. I’m glad I read the comment above this, as I too was doing some research! I found a character in a YA trilogy, who is Luc de Mons, and of course evil. But, a mysterious man on a train… a gift… warnings… I think I would have listened!

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  14. Good thing I read the comment above this! I looked him up too… and found a trilogy with a Luc de Mons, who is evil… almost ran away with that one. However, a mysterious man on a train… a gift… warnings. I think I would have listened!

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  15. hugmamma says:

    Aaahhh…nice twist. At least it didn’t end in two deaths. Or does it? Hmmm…

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  16. Nice metaphor with the many light and still dark. Even touching.

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  17. colonialist says:

    You demon-strate that everyone in this tale takes a dim view of things!

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  18. K.Z. says:

    loved the idea of the devil as a funny little French chap. not that i’d ever want to meet him in any form. clever tale. AnElephant did a wonderful job 🙂

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  19. Sandra says:

    Very clever! 🙂 I think he might be lingering in a very soul-less place.

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  20. niasunset says:

    I was going to search the name of this man, but I read all comments and replies… Not easy for me to understand all details but fascinated me this story… especially the lamps and the dark image… Thank you dear AnElephantCant, your writing fascinating me, even with my not enough language… Love, nia

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    • No, AnElephant thanks you, Nia, for taking the time and making the effort.
      He is happy that you are intrigued by his imagery, in 100 words it is not always easy to paint the whole picture.
      Hugs

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  21. I didn’t get the reference to the guy’s name either, although I gathered from the comments, that others did. Great story though. I love the idea of it being dark, no matter how many lights he lights. It’s akin to Lady Macbeth still seeing the blood, now matter how much she washes.
    -David

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    • Thank you, David, it is not easy, as you well know, to spell things out in 100 words, and sometimes the clues are by necessity cryptic.
      And cryptic clues are seen by some immediately, and by others not at all, not a measure of intelligence but where the mind happens to be, in AnElephant’s humble opinion.
      And love your Lady M analogy, excellent!

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  22. znjavid says:

    You are clever!

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  23. A very interesting story that begs to be continued. This is a really scary beginning. I think I’d try to change compartments.

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  24. So Luc deMons bumped off the wife and now this guy wants to renege on the deal?? Not very bright, is he? 🙂

    janet

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  25. Anja says:

    I will add…this is brilliant! Luc de Mons…oh my. I am not sure he has much choice in upholding his side of this bargain.

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  26. Al says:

    Make a deal with a demon and you will not come out of the other side very well. Great story from AnElephant

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  27. Indira says:

    It aroused interest from the very first line. Would like to know what was the other side of bargain?

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  28. zennjennc says:

    Is Luc a demon or is this guy really dead and just doesn’t know it? Great story.

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  29. AnElephant makes me jealous with his swift and witty pen, smiles. I am still fumbling about for a “Bright” idea to participate!

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  30. Dear Elephant,

    I’m a little puzzled by Luc de Mons. I looked for a reference and couldn’t find one. I get the impression he’s a demon or the devil himself. Am I warm? Nonetheless, a well done story. I like the way you brought the first line around to the end.

    Not sure which I enjoyed more, your intro or your story. 😉

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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