The Bench

AnElephantCant be an ornithologist
Although he does like to see pictures of birds
He is not sure whether
To discuss their feathers
When he only has 100 words

Once again it is Friday Fictioneer time.
Top twitcher Rochelle watches while lakeside legendeers create magic in 100 words.
And AnElephant tries not to mess up the nest.
The idea is to write a very short story, circa 100 words, based on this picture prompt (below).
That’s it.

Copyright- The Reclining Gentleman

Copyright- The Reclining Gentleman

The Bench

I know I am being watched.
I sit gazing across the water, wondering how close they are.
And if I have any chance of escape.
People stroll by, some pause to take in the view.
A cigarette packet is tossed, too casually, falls to the ground.
I scowl at his back, he is oblivious to my annoyance.
As I stand to leave, I stoop, and, with obvious irritation, push it into the bin.
I now have in my palm the last piece of the device.
I blow into my cold hands.
It fits perfectly.
And now they are too late.

About AnElephantCant

An artist/writer/poet combination whose blogs reflect an approach to life that celebrates nature and takes a tongue-in-cheek view of most issues. So you get rhymes and doodles, photographs and comment. Irreverent and irrelevant. Occasionally funny, sometimes serious, mostly pointless. https://anelephantcant.me/
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44 Responses to The Bench

  1. Nan Falkner says:

    Dear Elephant, A master sleuth you must be and so clever as a drop to act irritated with the annoying liter of a stupid person. Very good job! Nan 🙂

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  2. wildbilbo says:

    Nice and mysterious – appropriate for the spy-like exchange going on. Making the connection between the ‘dropped cigarette packet’ and him actually receiving the last bit… I missed that the first time… but I didnt mind a second read :).

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  3. i b arora says:

    interesting piece

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  4. Ooh, James Bond eat your heart out, the Elephant is undercover. Very enjoyable story.

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  5. Elephant, That was mysterious even after the ending. It would make a great beginning hook for a longer story. Well written. 🙂 — Susan

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  6. You’ve created another evil genius. Is there no limit to the madness???
    Rhetorical…good story as always.

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  7. Sightsnbytes says:

    Everyone enjoys a good mystery! Nice work!

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  8. Maree Gallop says:

    Mysterious and intriguing take on the prompt, love to know what happens next.

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  9. Margaret says:

    Aha! I’m glad I commented after reading the previous answer. He is obviously skilled at playing the cover role to the bitter end – in this case that of a concerned, civic-spirited citizen. Scowling at his back indeed. I like how you’ve shown the steady progress of the final bits of the plan, and the conclusion. Very intriguing.
    Marg

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  10. You’re a natural at spy thrillers, Mr Elephant. I wasn’t confused, as much as curious, about what device he’d finally fitted together and what it might do. I searched and searched but was as clueless as the people pursuing him.

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  11. Nice bit of spy craft, Elephant!!

    janet

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  12. MMmmmm. What was in the packet? Too bad you only had 100 words.

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  13. The real question is, is he a goody or a baddy. Intriguing!

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  14. A little cloak and dagger.. what can be better in a case like this? wonder if the next scene will be mind-blowing?

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  15. Adam Ickes says:

    What is this device and what does it do? Must be something big if they’re too late to stop if (or if they were even trying to stop him in the first place). I greatly enjoyed this one, sir elephant.

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  16. emmylgant says:

    Wonderful take on this prompt.
    Nah! You did not mess up the nest!
    Je vois cela comme la premiere page de quelque chose plus long et tout a fait comme un Rubic’s cube…

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  17. Lovely intrigue with this, but like Jessie I’m a little confused at the ending. He’s thrown away the cigarette packet, but he has something in his hands…? I’m sure it’s just me.
    Claire

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  18. Oh my, very intriguing. Like a spy novel. I had a similar idea, but now I’ll need to find a different approach. And stop reading stories before I write my own. 😀

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  19. dmmacilroy says:

    Dear AEC,

    A fine and mysterious tale. I will wait to find out who ‘they’ is and what on earth the device is. With your hook set firmly in my mind, I am yours until the end.

    Aloha,

    Doug

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  20. Dear Elephant,

    I have the feeling that this story has an explosive ending.

    I think perhaps you don’t need “is” after cigarette pack.

    Well done and mysterious.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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    • The ending is obviously another story.
      AnElephant does not incur your famous wrath by straying beyond his 100 word allowance!
      Your comment about ‘is’ confused me, until I realised that I could move the comma, parenthesising ‘tossed too casually’.
      But then it would only be 99 words!
      Or I could add ‘and’ before ‘falls’ and blow the consequences!
      Thank you, always a pleasure.

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      • As you wish, Sir. I don’t usually count the words of another unless it’s a blatant stray. My thought is 100 words or less. Mine are often 98-99.

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        • AnElephant, as an exercise in disciplined creativity, almost always writes exactly 100 words.
          The only exceptions are the occasions he goes way over, but if he likes the story he just goes with it.
          Rereading the sentence you mentioned did show that it could have been better structured.
          Thank you.

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  21. Nice story and a lot of creativity from just one picture! I’m a bit lost with this one (don’t be worried… I was confused with Sandra’s too, must be having a bad day!) but I’m sure it will hit me soon.

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    • Thank you for your kind words.
      This is a live drop, the last piece of the device is passed via the packet.
      That’s all.
      Blowing on the hands is the opportunity to fit pieces together.
      Tu comprends?

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